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**phuthuy-zin** · 09-04-2008, 08:26 PM

Helo everyone! I'm a new member and I glad to join this forum.
The first time I really like this forum and want to contribute something for this forum. So my English skill is not comfortable that order me to practise English anymore. This is the first time I depend on this forum for help. If you can help me to correct grammar faults in this essay, I will give you something in reward for this help.

This is my essay: SINGLE PARENT ADOPTION (YES/NO)
http://blog.360.yahoo.com/blog-dVaNcY8lbr8awvhHfnBu2mUq

**phuthuy-zin** · 10-04-2008, 08:52 PM

Single Parent Adoption

Part 1
The trends of married couples today in taking care of their children are hiring a wet nurse or single parent adoption. In model life, married couples are following physical life and living in the less sentiment life. Therefore, many couples are breaking to pieces and their children will be under the influence of this failure. Many researches have shown that taking care of children constantly by mum and dad from birth is increasing opportunity for children to develop all of their potentialities and ensure their health for growing up.
Mum and dad are together taking care of their children constantly help to develop all of their potentiality. For example, a child is growing in a happy family will become a self-confident and powerful child. Living in happy parents creates assistance for the child to do anything. In addition, when the child is a failure or obstructed by obstacle, he will know how to accept the situations or self-controlled to find out the solution for problems if he is educated by his parents.
Ensuring children’s health for growing up is concerned by their nutrition. For example, when a baby at the breast is received the mother’s milk, he will be inherited antibodies from his parents which protest against diseases. In addition, a diet system for a child after two years old is also important. Powdered milk or soy-bean milk is providing protein, sugar and vitamin for the child. Potato soup or baby foods is also providing nitrogen, fiber and water for the child. Therefore, a good care of nutrition is provided for children by parents are very important that help children’s growing up.
In summary, to ensure that children are growing up with good health and develop all of their potentialities, they must be took care by their parents. Child who will become success in future life is often living in a happy family has enough mum and dad. In model life, married couple relationships should be holds fast by society to guarantee a good parents adoption.

Part 2
Everybody in the model life is looking after a woman has a baby without husband or a man has a baby without wife easier than in the past. A single parent adoption today often causes of many problems in social life. When a child is cared by a single parent, he has not enough affection of parents or nutrition for growing up. Therefore, he won’t have a firm psychology and will being a disadvantage in social.
Many single parent adoptions often do not have enough time to play game with their children and interested in their children lifestyle. Therefore, the children are developing with no affection of parents. Besides, the children do not have ensuring about nutrition because single parent often do not have enough information about children’s regimen. Thus, the children are not growing up with enough height and intelligent.
The children who live with single parent often have some psychology diseases because they have to live under pressure of no mum or no dad feeling. A single parent often does not explain correct reasons for children about there are no dad or no mum. Also, a child no dad or no mum is being in prejudice of people and has fewer interests. In addition, there are many difficult things to balance between children and the single parent demands because the children don’t want to share sentiment with a new person who is become a new dad or new mum of them.
To sum of, children need to have enough parents for taking care of them because a perfect family is a certain basis for children to develop good personalities. A family with enough parents forms good children and creates many good manners for society. Also, a sound family is an important element for building a good society.

**phuthuy-zin** · 12-04-2008, 07:16 PM

This is my essay, it has some mistakes that I hope everybody can help me to solve the. So please take it in your free time or comfortable state.

Single Parent Adoption

Everybody in the model life is looking after a woman has a baby without husband or a man has a baby without wife easier than in the past. A single parent adoption today often causes of many problems in social life. When a child is cared by a single parent, he has not enough affection of parents or nutrition for growing up. Therefore, he won’t have a firm psychology and will being a disadvantage in social.
Many single parent adoptions often do not have enough time to play game with their children and interested in their children lifestyle. Therefore, the children are developing with no affection of parents. Besides, the children do not have ensuring about nutrition because single parent often do not have enough information about children’s regimen. Thus, the children are not growing up with enough height and intelligent.
The children who live with single parent often have some psychology diseases because they have to live under pressure of no mum or no dad feeling. A single parent often does not explain correct reasons for children about there are no dad or no mum. Also, a child no dad or no mum is being in prejudice of people and has fewer interests. In addition, there are many difficult things to balance between children and the single parent demands because the children don’t want to share sentiment with a new person who is become a new dad or new mum of them.
To sum of, children need to have enough parents for taking care of them because a perfect family is a certain basis for children to develop good personalities. A family with enough parents forms good children and creates many good manners for society. Also, a sound family is an important element for building a good society.

Regard,
Phuthuy-zin

09-04-2008, 08:26 PM	#1
phuthuy-zin Nhập môn đệ tử Tham gia ngày: Apr 2008 Bài gửi: 3 :	Correcting grammar, spelling, coherence faults in paragraph and essay Helo everyone! I'm a new member and I glad to join this forum. The first time I really like this forum and want to contribute something for this forum. So my English skill is not comfortable that order me to practise English anymore. This is the first time I depend on this forum for help. If you can help me to correct grammar faults in this essay, I will give you something in reward for this help. This is my essay: SINGLE PARENT ADOPTION (YES/NO) http://blog.360.yahoo.com/blog-dVaNcY8lbr8awvhHfnBu2mUq thay đổi nội dung bởi: phuthuy-zin, 09-04-2008 lúc 08:31 PM.

10-04-2008, 08:52 PM	#2
phuthuy-zin Nhập môn đệ tử Tham gia ngày: Apr 2008 Bài gửi: 3 :	Single Parent Adoption Part 1 The trends of married couples today in taking care of their children are hiring a wet nurse or single parent adoption. In model life, married couples are following physical life and living in the less sentiment life. Therefore, many couples are breaking to pieces and their children will be under the influence of this failure. Many researches have shown that taking care of children constantly by mum and dad from birth is increasing opportunity for children to develop all of their potentialities and ensure their health for growing up. Mum and dad are together taking care of their children constantly help to develop all of their potentiality. For example, a child is growing in a happy family will become a self-confident and powerful child. Living in happy parents creates assistance for the child to do anything. In addition, when the child is a failure or obstructed by obstacle, he will know how to accept the situations or self-controlled to find out the solution for problems if he is educated by his parents. Ensuring children’s health for growing up is concerned by their nutrition. For example, when a baby at the breast is received the mother’s milk, he will be inherited antibodies from his parents which protest against diseases. In addition, a diet system for a child after two years old is also important. Powdered milk or soy-bean milk is providing protein, sugar and vitamin for the child. Potato soup or baby foods is also providing nitrogen, fiber and water for the child. Therefore, a good care of nutrition is provided for children by parents are very important that help children’s growing up. In summary, to ensure that children are growing up with good health and develop all of their potentialities, they must be took care by their parents. Child who will become success in future life is often living in a happy family has enough mum and dad. In model life, married couple relationships should be holds fast by society to guarantee a good parents adoption. Part 2 Everybody in the model life is looking after a woman has a baby without husband or a man has a baby without wife easier than in the past. A single parent adoption today often causes of many problems in social life. When a child is cared by a single parent, he has not enough affection of parents or nutrition for growing up. Therefore, he won’t have a firm psychology and will being a disadvantage in social. Many single parent adoptions often do not have enough time to play game with their children and interested in their children lifestyle. Therefore, the children are developing with no affection of parents. Besides, the children do not have ensuring about nutrition because single parent often do not have enough information about children’s regimen. Thus, the children are not growing up with enough height and intelligent. The children who live with single parent often have some psychology diseases because they have to live under pressure of no mum or no dad feeling. A single parent often does not explain correct reasons for children about there are no dad or no mum. Also, a child no dad or no mum is being in prejudice of people and has fewer interests. In addition, there are many difficult things to balance between children and the single parent demands because the children don’t want to share sentiment with a new person who is become a new dad or new mum of them. To sum of, children need to have enough parents for taking care of them because a perfect family is a certain basis for children to develop good personalities. A family with enough parents forms good children and creates many good manners for society. Also, a sound family is an important element for building a good society.

12-04-2008, 07:16 PM	#3
phuthuy-zin Nhập môn đệ tử Tham gia ngày: Apr 2008 Bài gửi: 3 :	This is my essay, it has some mistakes that I hope everybody can help me to solve the. So please take it in your free time or comfortable state. Single Parent Adoption Everybody in the model life is looking after a woman has a baby without husband or a man has a baby without wife easier than in the past. A single parent adoption today often causes of many problems in social life. When a child is cared by a single parent, he has not enough affection of parents or nutrition for growing up. Therefore, he won’t have a firm psychology and will being a disadvantage in social. Many single parent adoptions often do not have enough time to play game with their children and interested in their children lifestyle. Therefore, the children are developing with no affection of parents. Besides, the children do not have ensuring about nutrition because single parent often do not have enough information about children’s regimen. Thus, the children are not growing up with enough height and intelligent. The children who live with single parent often have some psychology diseases because they have to live under pressure of no mum or no dad feeling. A single parent often does not explain correct reasons for children about there are no dad or no mum. Also, a child no dad or no mum is being in prejudice of people and has fewer interests. In addition, there are many difficult things to balance between children and the single parent demands because the children don’t want to share sentiment with a new person who is become a new dad or new mum of them. To sum of, children need to have enough parents for taking care of them because a perfect family is a certain basis for children to develop good personalities. A family with enough parents forms good children and creates many good manners for society. Also, a sound family is an important element for building a good society. Regard, Phuthuy-zin